Persuasive+Writing

  Persuasive writing 1st writing example

We all enjoy a family fun day at the zoo, but has anyone ever given a second thought about the opportunities and experiences the animals are deprived of?

So many zoo’s provide excellent care and a safe environment for their animals, but I’m not talking about those types of zoo’s I’m talking about the poorly organized and structured zoo’s that cant meet their animals needs, they keep them in cages instead of enclosures. I don’t think that there is a need for these zoo’s unless they make changes to they way they care for their animals.

These types of zoo’s claim that they are educational, but I think that seeing an animal in a cage does little to educate people because of their inability to explore, interact with other species and their own species, perform natural behaviors and develop instincts like survival and hunting skills when really all you get to see is the shape, colour and sounds they make. While these zoo’s protect these animals from being hunted and culled by poaches for important trades and their natural habitat, their needs are not being met and I think that the smaller, poorly run zoo’s are unnecessary to have. We don’t need to have zoo’s that cant take care of their animals, we need to have more national parks or better breeding programs for those zoo’s that are struggling so that they can improve.

I am not saying that all zoos are bad but i just think that you hear too much about zoo's that do not benefit the welfare of their animals, So how is this any different apposed to an animal being hunted in the wild for its fur, when it is treated just as badly by people who claim to be protecting its majestic species? I have shared my view on this topic and i believe that if changes like better breeding progams, support needed for the zoo's that are struggling and better treatment of their animals were introduced in those types of countries, animals in that situation would experience the respect that they should be treated with.

Goals for next time: My goals for next time would b to begin to support my opening statements, begin text with interesting hook and Use correct punctuation and use more paragraphs with background support.  PERSUASIVE WRITING 2   A litter of kittens with their tails cut off found dead in an apartment 3 weeks later, a new born puppy beaten and then thrown off a bridge, cats burnt to death, a dog mutilated, starved and beaten. What would be your punishment if you threw a dog off the Fairfield Bridge? Possibly a $7.000 fine or a 3 months imprisonment. But what if you did that to a three year old child, you could be facing15 years to life imprisonment. How are the outcomes of these two horrific crimes different?

I believe that cruelty to animals is a crime that shouldn't be given an exception, just like murder or assault to a human, animals should be given the same right because like us they are breathing, living creatures that should be treated with respect. The NZ government only give fines up to$50.000 or a maximum of 3 years imprisonment for a crime equally as cruel to an animal as to a human (1999 ANIMAL RIGHTS) it should be changed because animal welfare is falling and I’m not just talking about animals that get abused in your neighborhood, but animals that are hunted, slaughtered and treated cruelly at such haste of man kind .In some country's animal welfare is the last thing the government worries about, because it has been argued many times that the life of an animal is much less important to the life of a human. 

<span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial">Animals are subjected to the hideous crimes of man kind for the betterment of the human race. It is unfair that for stabbing a person to death you may be sentenced for life imprisonment, but if you did that to a dog you would get off much easier. In some country's animal welfare is the last thing the government even has time to think about about and this should be changed because any abuse is unacceptable. So many animals are abused in different ways and in different forms of abuse. But I’m talking about animals that may be domesticated and abused in your neighborhood. Animal cruelty is horrific and disgusting, but it is crime that goes unnoticed or unreported. I strongly disagree with this law and I believe that should be changed because the punishments are too easily avoided, because people don’t care enough about the pain and suffering of others. Animals are just like humans- we sleep we eat and breathe and when one of us abuses another human, we get punished severly- so why doesn't that happen is we do that to another species? <span style="FONT-SIZE: 4pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'">

<span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial">A survey taken in 2007 showed that 56% of the animals abused are dogs, whatever happened to "mans best friend". Animals are loyal, loving companions and no matter what should not be abused. I think that a life of an animal should be equal to the life of a human and that they should be harder on the punishments they give to these people that harm an animal. <span style="FONT-SIZE: 4pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: 'Comic Sans MS'"> <span style="FONT-SIZE: 5pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial"> <span style="FONT-SIZE: 11.5pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial">You may think that just getting these crimes heard about and dealt with make it alright but it won’t stop without a community approach towards the education of our generation about the consequences of animal abuse and the pain and suffering of others, because every little effort from every person can make a huge difference.

Imagine if this cat was walking down your street screeching in agony and pain, it is suffocating on its own collar. What would you do if you saw someone put this on the cat? What would you do to help this cat?

We must <span style="FONT-SIZE: 9pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial">stop <span style="FONT-SIZE: 11.5pt; COLOR: rgb(0,204,0); FONT-FAMILY: Arial"> the cruelty to animals now before its too late to save another cat like this from an awful, cruel death. If we just think- if we save one cat, another three could be saved, people might start acting upon that and we could put an end to animal cruelty. <span style="FONT-SIZE: 11pt; COLOR: rgb(237,12,12); FONT-FAMILY: Arial"> <span style="COLOR: rgb(255,162,0)">Reflection: <span style="COLOR: rgb(153,204,0)">I compared this text to my last rubric and I think that I have improved because last time I needed to support my ideas and this time I think I have done that more but I think my punctuation is way off. <span style="COLOR: rgb(153,204,0)">